Introduction
My research report is going
to be about the Spanish medieval times
in Spain. I will research the reigns and kingdoms and the kings
and queens of in this time.
period. I will bring you through the decades and eras
of the dictators. [I think Franco was the only dictator, hence
one dictator and one era.] I recently just came back
from a semester in Spain. While I was over there I was
in a History of Spain class that was very interesting. I would love to
share this research and information. with you. [If
something can be said with fewer words, it almost certainly will sound
more direct, and better. See Strunk
on this point, rule
13.]
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The Historic Roots of Spain
Spain is located on the Iberian Penisula, where it ocupies
[sp]a position that is very accesible [sp] from other countries and continents.
Spain is situated between the Mediterranean Sea and the
Atlantic Ocean, and Spain is the most extreme southern
country of Europe, which can be also known as Mediterranean
Europe. Spain is separated from Africa by about the
eight mile which formed the Strait of Gibraltar. Because
of this close connection between the proximity of the
two continents, many of the cities in Spain are of foreign descent [Awkward:
rewrite the part about "descent."] For example, locations
like Africa, Europe and the Orient. [The last is not a sentence ...
it has no verb.]
One of the characteristic features of the early histoty
of Spain is the succesive waves of different peoples who spread all over
the Penisula. [Is there a reason to capitalize peninsula?] The first
to appear were the Iberians, a Libyan people, who came from the south.
Later came the Celts, a typically Aryan people (who came from the north),
and from the merging of the two there a arose a new race, the Celtiberians.[Are
you sure you want to say they were a new "race"?] ,
who, dDivided into several tribes (Cantabrians, Asturians, Lusitanians),
they gave their name to their respective homelands. The next to
arrive, attracted by mining wealth, were the Phoenicians, who founded a
number of trading posts along the coast, the most important being that
of Cadiz. After this Next came the Greeks, settlers,
who founded several towns, including Malaga and Ampurias. The Phoenicians,
in their struggle against the Greeks, called on the Carthaginians, who
took possesion (sp) of most of Spain. It was at this time that Rome raised
a border dispute in defense of the areas of Greek influence, and thus began
in the Penisula the Second
Punic War, which decided the fate of the world [The entire world?]at
that time. At this time After their victory, the Romans
began the conquest of Spain, which was to be under Roman rule for six centuries.(1)
[The Second Punic War was of very great significance in Roman history,
and they looked upon if forever after as "their finest hour."
It certainly deserves more than the very short treatment you afford it
here.]
The Romanization
Period
The cultural Romanization of the Iberian Penisula proceed
(sp) at approxiametly (sp) around the same time of the conquest. The
Romanization entailed the integration of Hispania into the political, social,
economic, cultural, and ideological structures world
of the Roman Empire. Because of differing intervening causes and factors,
the Romanization
process did not proceed at a steady pace throughout the
Penisula (sp). It proceeded more quickly in the more developed countries,
[I do not think one can call them "countries." Regions perhaps,
but not "countries."] such as Baetica, Levante and the Ebro
River Valley [river valley requires no caps], but less so in the
underdeveloped inland and northern regions which held in large
measure retained [see rule
13] their traditional systems of organization all the way to the
end of the Roman conquest.(2)
[All of these events of which you speak have years attached to them, and you should include them ... like the years of the Second Punic War to cite just one example.]
The religious practices of the native people of Spain
were also became romanized. [Rome is a proper
name and requires a capital, hence I think this verb "Romanize"
might also require one.] Many natives in the Penisula (sp) kept to
their longstanding religious traditions throughout the imperial domination.
Eventually, Christianity a superseded all other religions there
were. [Why do you italicize some of your words? Like "Christianity,"
for example?]
Spain benefited from the importation of the
Roman influence in so many ways, For example,
Spain benefited educationally, literary, and artistically. [You've
mixed two adverbs with one adjective (literary) which is why this sentence
is ungrammatical. The word must parallel the other two and be an adverb
because adjectives modify nouns or pronouns, but not verbs. The verb in
the sentence is "benefited." That's what adverbs are for.] Some
of the greatest Roman writers, politicians, and other orators were born
in this country. [Spain constituted several provinces of the Roman Empire,
which you should name. It was not a "country." Much of the
architecture in parts of Spain have Roman influence. Take a look at this
Roman piece of architecture [This
link (https://members.tripod.com/~cgilbert/romanbridge.gif) is inoperative]
that [learn the difference between the uses of "that"
and "which"] striked [no such word in English] me
to be some of the great developers of the Roman era and influence were:
the philospher Senecas (sp), the poets Lucan and Marcial; the orator Quintilan;
[You are using semicolons incorrectly.]and the emperors Trajan and
Hadrian. [That last is a very badly run on sentence and should be totally
rewritten into two or perhaps three sentences.] Many works of art dating
back from to the time of the Roman conquest are
preserved in art museums all over Spain. These include displaying
a variety of sculptures, mosaics, glassware, s and art
work. ["Sculptures, mosaics, glassware" ARE "art work."
So you are listing the same thing twice, which is redundant.]
[The reason the graphic does not work is that you say
the address is file:///A|/aqueduct.gif, i.e., on your disk and I do not
have your disk. When inserting images, you should give the complete online
address, even if it is your own site. So that the URL would then be something
like https://members.tripod.com/~cgilbert/aqueduct.gif -- assuming
the image was at your site. Since that does not work either, I conclude
that the image is just not there. If it is elsewhere, the URL would of
course be somethng else.]
Many
cities (pueblos) in Spain trace their roots to Roman occupation: Barcelona
(Barcino), Tarragona (Tarraco), Saragossa (Caesar Augusta), Seville (Hispalis),
Merida (Emerita Augusta), Leon (Legio), Astorga (Asturica Augusta). [Spain
was part of the Roman Empire, hence "occupation" is the wrong
word. We would not say that many of Idaho's towns can be traced to American
"occupation" after all.] These particular
cities functioned as the religious, cultural administrative and commercial
[missing two commas] center [requires plural ... for the plural
subject of the sentence] for the cities population.
Under the "Roman Truces" (pax Romana), the urban centers flourished
from the trade of farm goods and handicrafts. The Roman architectural model
was adopted for all public works and monuments. For example, temples, theaters,
aqueducts, sports arenas, bathhouses, stadiums, many of which are still
standing today.(3) The
museums that I visited when I ws (sp) studying over in Spain were; [semicolon?]
The Prado Museum in Madrid and the Picasso Museum in Barcelona. [Why
is the Prado capitalized but not the Picasso? The word "the"
is very rarely capitalized in English, unless it is part of a proper name
or if it begins a sentence. These are very basic rules of usage.] The
Prado Museum has my favorite piece called "Las
Meninas." ["https://members.tripod.com/~cgilbert/Lasmeninasfile.htm"
is not a working link. The image is not at your site, or it is spelled
wrongly, or both.]
The Establishment of the Muslims in the Iberian Penisula
The Muslims
["https://members.tripod.com/~cgilbert/map(muslim).gif" is
an inoperative link/] invaded the Iberian Penisula (sp) in the VII
century. [We do not use Roman numerals when we refer to centuries. We
use adjectives like "seventh." Also, the year was 711, so it
is not the seventh century at all.] They came from the
northern sector of Africa heading through
the Strait of Gibraltar. [The strait is made up of water. Do we "head
through" water? Or do we travel over it?] The Muslims easily defeated
the Visogoths and by 718 were masters of almost the entire penisula. Many
Spanish Christians converted to Islam, ans (sp) Muslims of different Syrians,
[Muslims of different Syrians??] Berbers-settled in Spain, although
their numbers were never great. The rich lands of southern Spain, which
they called al-Andalus, were especially attractive in comparison with
to the deserts of North Africa. [The ref to this following image
is just "spain7.gif" which would work if it were at your site,
but it seems not to be there. Check it, and then supply the entire URL,
as noted above. Also, image names are case sensitive, so check that too.]
A
man by the name of Abd al-Rahman from Syria managed to take over Al-Andalus
in the eighth century. He came from a family with power, who ruled the
Arab empire. [It is far more complicated than that. Abd al-Rahman was
one of the Umayyads. The Umayyads dominated the caliphate from 661 until
750 until they were ousted by their rivals, the Abbasids. The Umayyads
were Syrians hence the capital was at Damascus. The Abbasids (who ruled
until the thirteenth century) were from al-Iraq, so the capital was moved
to Bagdad. Abd al-Rahman was one of the few Umayyads to escape and he fled
to al-Andalus. You might want to take a look at Philip Hitti's History
of the Arabs, in particular the chapter on the Umayyad Caliphate of Cordoba.]
He reunited Moorish Spain (Moorish is a word the spanish (sp)
call for Muslim) ["call for Muslim"? Do you mean that Moorish
is what the Christians called the Muslims?] and declared himself caliph
of Cordoba. Cordoba is located in the Andalusian region of Spain. Most
of the architecture in Cordoba is based on the Moorish religion for this
reason. Cordoda (sp) is a beautiful city with one of the most highest influences
["one of the most highest influences" is awkward and ungrammatical.
Rewrite completely.] from Muslims. Abd al-Rahman's reign from (929-961)
marks the apogee of Muslim Spain, a time of economic and cultural splendor.
[You are confusing names here. Just as England had more than one king
named Henry, so Cordoba had more that one amir named Abd al-Rahman. When
that happens, a monarch gets a number -- like Elizabeth II. It is the same
in Islam.] Besides Granada (where I lived), Cordoba was my other
favorite city in Spain. With its small cobble-stone "calles"
and white architecture to its most extravagant mosques. [The preceding
is not a sentence. Sentences require verbs. Also, the common English usage
is "from ... to" not "with ...to" Rewrite.]Al-Andalus
was a region of prosperous cities and intense trade. [The preceding
sentence is repetitious. Also, can trade be "intense"? I think
you may mean something else entirely.] The Muslim rulers generally
tolerated Christians ans (sp) Jews and encouraged cultural diversity.(4)
After the death of Rahman, many different occasions started
to develop. Al-Andalus began dividing into states or "taifas".
There developed two dynasties of Islamic ruling that wanted to enhance
more directly the Islam religion. The first group were called the Almoravids
(1086-1147). These "rugged Berber nomads" derived from the continent
of Africa. . They originated a religiously-political Islamic movement toward
the "native Moors." ["https://members.tripod.com/~cgilbert/hiofmoosp1139-1331.jpg"
is inoperative. It is almost certain that there can be no jpg called "hiofmoosp1139-1331.jpg."]
When the Almoravids arrived in the Iberian Penisula, they destroyed
(defeated) Alfonso VI. (5)
["https://members.tripod.com/~cgilbert/alfonso VI.htm" is inoperative.
Besides, file names cannot have spaces in them.]They ruled North Africa
and Spain 1056-1147. Marrakesh in Morocco became their Islamic capital
in 1070. In 1086 the Almoravids crossed the Strait of Gibraltar into Spain
and defeated the Christian army of reconquest, and annexed the territories
of Muslim Spain. The Almoravids were conquered by the refined civilization
of Spain and were unable to defend their empire against the Almohads. The
Almohads were an Arabic people who had gained control over the Almoravids,
[No, they were not an Arabic people. Arabic people are people who come
from Arabia. These people came from Morocco. The "generic" term
for Islamic people from North Africa (except for Egyptians) is "Berber."
The name "Almohade" is a Spanish corruption of the Arabic "al-Muwahhidun"
which means "unitarians" in that language. The sect was founded
by Muhammad ibn-Tumart (about 1178 to 1130) of the Masmudah tribe. He proclaimed
himself "al-Mahdi" (the prophet) sent by Allah to restore Islam
to its original purity and orthodoxy. Hitti tells us that he was "small,
ugly, and misshapen, this son of a mosque lamplighter lived the life of
an ascetic, and opposed music, drinking, and other manifestations of laxity.
When a young man, his zeal led him to assault in the streets of Fas (Fez)
a sister of the reigning Murabit Ali ibn-Yusuf because she went unveiled."
The story is told by the very famous medieval Arab historian, Ibn
Khaldun. Finally, just about every one of these Spanish names, like
Almohades, is a corruption of the original Arabic word.] their traditional
enemy in Northern Africa. The Almohads invaded the Iberian Penisula and
reconstructed for the second time the unity of Al-Andalus, making it independent
from Morocco in 1170. [This is just not correct. In 1170, the capital
was transferred from Marrakesh to Seville but the emirate remained intact
and included Algeria and Tunisia too. They remained in Spain until 1212.]
The Almohads were also successful in their attempts
to keep the Christians' advance from going anywhere.(6)
The Almohads were another Islamic dynasty. They came into Spain and ruled
from 1130-1269. This Berber group lead by Abd al Mumin demolished the Almoravids
and took over the Almoravids capital (Marrakesh). At the same time, all
the Muslim territory in Spain was occupied.
[The text that I have highlighted in yellow appears to repeat things
that you have already said, thoght the years cited are different.] Seville
became the capital of the Western (no cap for "western")
Islamic world. Since the Almohads [the word is Almohade] dynasty
was so large in size, social divisions and religious conservatism the empire
fell to pieces. ["social divisions and religious conservatism the
empire fell to pieces" makes no sense.] The Almohads were confronted
by the Christian "Reconquista" which included Castile, Navarre
and Aragon. They joined together to form a common front against the Almohads.
The Almohads were defeated at Las Navas de Tolosa in 1212 which resulted
in their total withdrawl from Spain.(7)
[You are contradicting yourself. Just a few lines ago,
you wrote that "They came
into Spain and ruled from 1130-1269."] The
Reconquest was just about completed in about the middle of the 13th century.
The only two cities that the Muslims retained and had influence on was
Granada ["two cities was" should be "two cities were"
... subject and verb must agree, which is grade school English.] (in
the most southern part of Spain and Castille in the north. It was
in the 11th century, when Moorish unity broke down, and the
an anti-Muslim spirit took hold in the Christian kingdoms of northern
Spain began to be affected by an anti-Muslim spirit making
the Reconquest began to excel [wrong word. Do you mean accelerate?]
rather rapidly.
In 1224, the Kingdom of Granada, which is also known as
the Third Taifa Kingdom [why the italics?] was known as the last
area of Muslim Spain influence because of the successive
conquests made by Castile and Aragon. As a state of Castile, the Nasrid
dynasty of Granada managed to hold the kingdom together for two and a half
centuries. [This is very confusing. Are you suggesting that Grenada
was a part of Castile? Castile and Laon are in the north, on either side
of the Douro river. Look at this
map.] Although the political importance of the Kingdom of Granada
did not have high standards, [Rewrite. How can "political importance"
have "high standards."] its commerce and the
arts of the Kingdom did attain won great acclaim.
prestige. In 1492, the Catholic kings headed toward the
city of Granada, the Roman conquest of which proved the last stage of the
Reconquest of Spain ["the Roman conquest of which proved the last
stage of the Reconquest of Spain" makes no sense to me.] and the
end of the Muslim rule in the Iberian penisula.(8)
Penisula.
The Catholic Monarchs
This era of time marks [past tense,
please] the ["the" should be "a"] step forward
for Catholicism, when the country of Spain is
finally coming came back together. [The trouble
with your assertion is that you are assuming that Spain had at some time
been "together" which is not really true. It had been two Roman
provinces. Then it was invaded by the Vandals and the Visigoths. Even during
the shortlived Visigothic kingdom of Spain, the Vandals held the south.
Then the Muslims defeated the Vandals and the Visigoths, and except for
a little pocket of Christians way up in the north, that was the first time
the peninsula was united, only to have the unity unravel precisely because
of the reconquista, something which Spanish historians have argued shaped
Spanish character forever. You should read the history of Claudio Sanchez
Albornoz, for example.] Starting out with the marriage
of the Catholic Monarchs, Isabella of Castile and Ferdinand of Aragon in
1469. [The preceding is not a sentence even with the "Starting
out." Rewrite.] This Their marriage united the
two kingdoms, united the entire country together as one and started a widespread
growth for Spain. At the same time of the two Monarchs During their
reign the city of Granada witnessed the end of which
was under Moorish rule when it was conquered and
taken over ["conquered and taken over" says the same
thing twice. Conquest means rule.]by Isabel I and Fernando II. This
ended the reconquest. to its fullest.(9)
The
Catholic
Monarchs were of great importance in the
early midst [the "early midst"? when might that have been?]
of Spanish mediveil [please!]times. The most amazing Alhambra lies
on the foothills of Granada. The Alhambra is the fortress where all the
kings lived. It was an age of transition. [What does this sentence have
to do with the one before it? Anything at all?] During the second half
of the 15th century, the states of Europe had transformed into authoritarian
monarchies where the king held unlawfully [Who says they were held unlawfully?
Which "states of Europe" are you talking about?] the distintive
(sp) powers. The powers that the king held were by the clergy, nobles and
representives of the cities. In the Iberian Penisula the same system followed.
[Systems do not "follow."] This process culimated the
reign of the Catholic Monarchs. In 1474 Isabel was crowned Queen of Castilie.
Footnotes
[The site that you call "Internet Yahoo" is in fact Roman Spain, part of a larger tourist information site. yahoo is just a search engine. Also, footnotes end with periods and actual books require publication information. See Turabian. As for the site lists here, it seems to be that they are commonly being enclosed with parenteses, as in (http://www.hotmail.com).]
1.)Internet Si Spain: http://www.DocuWeb.ca/SiSpain/english/history/hisintro.html
2.) Internet Yahoo: http://www.camelotintl.com/heritage/roman4.html
3.) Internet Yahoo: http://www.camelotintl.com/heritage/roman5.html
4.) Academic American Encyclopedia #1 pg. 306-7 [Italicize book titles.]
5.) Academic American Encyclopedia #1 pg. 279 [Italicize book titles.]
6.) Internet Yahoo: http://www.camelotintl.com/heritage/mus4.html
7.) Academic American Encyclopedia #1 pgs. 306-7 [Italicize book titles.]
8.) Internet Yahoo: http://www.camelotintl.com/heritage/mus4.html [Fix link.]
9.)Internet Si Spain: http://www.DocuWeb.ca/SiSpain/english/history/hisintro.html [Fix link.]
Bibliography
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